| | Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher | |
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Lanstrlen
Posts : 1199 Join date : 2009-08-19 Age : 29 Location : Cheltenham,England
| Subject: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Sat Aug 22, 2009 11:50 pm | |
| {Basic(s)} Name:Cruril Jenson Goldleaf. Nickname(Optional):Cru,Jens,Cruril Age:95 Race/Species:Half elf Sexual Orientation:Bi Hometown:The Analaian forest Occupation:Elven ranger,Elvish teacher
{Physical} Eyes:Purple Hair:black Body:Nipple peircing Face:tapered ears,angular face Height:6 foot 11 inches Weight:9 stone 6 pounds
{Personality} Dark and mysterious Cruril is hard to make friends with but fiercly loyal,he has a great dislike of vampires,as they were the ones who have been following him for years, and a longing to return to the forests of his home land.With little left to live for he has turned to children for inspiration and to pass on his knowledge,he has a tendancy to judge and read people and can be very brutaly honest.He also has a tendancy to sing to plants with the song of life,making them grow more and more,his vegetarian diet means he keeps a small vegetable garden with a few fruit tree's and the like where ever he goes.
{Background} Cruril's past is one of war,during his 71st naming day party his home forest was raised to the ground and through the tramour Cruril has forgotten all beond that,even his parents. He was taken by a vampire who knew that if Cruril died so did the Avendesora,the tree of life as he was linked life to life with Avendesora from birth. so the vampire drugged Cruril,this drug made him loose his memory,though he may not remember his mother Mari-anne was an elf and his father Jenson a mortal man,they fell in love after meeting on pure happenstance while Jenson was out on a hunting trip,3 weeks later they were married and Mari-ann was pregnant with Cruril,like his father Cruril made an oath to only what was readily available,making him a vegetarian.
{Appearance} [Only admins are allowed to see this image]
Last edited by Lanstrlen on Sun Aug 23, 2009 12:18 am; edited 3 times in total (Reason for editing : To fix the picture.) | |
| | | Pretty.Little.Mistake
Posts : 427 Join date : 2009-08-18 Age : 31 Location : Ireland
| Subject: RE: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf. Sat Aug 22, 2009 11:58 pm | |
| You should know by now that the background would not suffice. ><
How did he lose his memory? You need to explain that and a bit of his past. How is he a half elf?
The personality needs to be more detailed too. | |
| | | Lanstrlen
Posts : 1199 Join date : 2009-08-19 Age : 29 Location : Cheltenham,England
| Subject: Re: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Sun Aug 23, 2009 12:09 am | |
| Ok there edited -.- sorry a few typo's and ill thought out bits lol
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| | | Pretty.Little.Mistake
Posts : 427 Join date : 2009-08-18 Age : 31 Location : Ireland
| Subject: Re: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Sun Aug 23, 2009 12:16 am | |
| - Lanstrlen wrote:
Cruril's past is one of war,during his 71st naming day party his home forest was raised to the ground and through the tramour Cruril has forgotten all beond that,even his parents. He was taken by a vampire who knew that is Cruril died so did the Avendesora,the tree of life, so the vampire drugged Cruril,this drug made him loose his memory. That makes no sense, and it's hard to read too. Fix it. Why does he hate Horril? You need to explain that in the background, if they have history. If you just intend to his character to take an instant dislike to the boy, then you shouldn't include it in the personality. | |
| | | Rammstein
Posts : 236 Join date : 2009-08-18 Age : 32 Location : Florida, USA
| Subject: Re: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Sun Aug 23, 2009 12:29 am | |
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| | | Lanstrlen
Posts : 1199 Join date : 2009-08-19 Age : 29 Location : Cheltenham,England
| Subject: Re: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Sun Aug 23, 2009 12:30 am | |
| Elvish I believe I put that in there,if not sorry. | |
| | | Pretty.Little.Mistake
Posts : 427 Join date : 2009-08-18 Age : 31 Location : Ireland
| Subject: RE: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf. Sun Aug 23, 2009 7:17 pm | |
| It'll do... Just please keep an eye on your grammar. The way you put your sentences together is often a little messed up. | |
| | | Lanstrlen
Posts : 1199 Join date : 2009-08-19 Age : 29 Location : Cheltenham,England
| Subject: Re: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Sun Aug 23, 2009 8:12 pm | |
| Yeah I know,I try but it doesn't help I have a few learning difficulties and I got taught to write things the way I do in primary school,and only started correcting it 2 years ago. so does "it'll do" mean Cruril is approved? | |
| | | Pretty.Little.Mistake
Posts : 427 Join date : 2009-08-18 Age : 31 Location : Ireland
| Subject: RE: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf. Mon Aug 24, 2009 1:21 am | |
| Well he's been moved here, hasn't he? So quite obviously it does. | |
| | | Lanstrlen
Posts : 1199 Join date : 2009-08-19 Age : 29 Location : Cheltenham,England
| Subject: Re: Cruril Jenson Goldleaf - Elvish Teacher Mon Aug 24, 2009 1:22 am | |
| Oh yeah I only just noticed he had been moved into the approved,hehe. | |
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